Additional Sample Essay (Score = 2)
I also believe that one more year of high school is unecessary for some if they have already been accepted to colleges and know what they want to do with their future. I think if one more year of school is offered it should depend on your grades and what all you have done with the past four years that decides if you have to go another year. I believe you shouldn't have to if you have made A's and B's all four years, because you are ready to go on. This is just my view on things, I hope I have been of some assistance to your decision.
Scoring Explanation
This essay demonstrates a weak response to the task. The writer takes a position on the issue with a qualification, thus showing a little recognition of multiple positions (Some need more time than others so I believe one more year of high school added is a good idea for some students. . . . I also believe that one more year of high school is unecessary for some if they have already been accepted to colleges and know what they want to do with their future).
The essay is thinly developed, offering only a little general explanation to support each position (One more year of school will take stress off of many students because they won't have to cram packed schedules. This extra year will also give students more time to participate in sports, fine arts, or any type of clubs. . . . I believe you shouldn't have to if you have made A's and B's all four years, because you are ready to go on).
Some organization is evident, as ideas related to each position are grouped in different parts of the essay, and some transitions are used. The introduction and conclusion are discernable, but are only minimal statements without development (This is just my view on things, I hope I have been of some assistance to your decision).
Language use is simple, with a little variety in sentence structure. Errors are sometimes distracting, but do not affect understanding.
